Utopia

• Artist: Hisora-sama
• Description: I wrote this based on a theme given to me by my English teacher. I tried to make it in a 5-7-5-7 syllable form, with the last word of the first line rhyming with the last word of the third line, and the same thing for the second and fourth line. All comments and constructive criticism are greatly appreciated.
• Date: 09/07/2008
• Tags: utopia hope

A human is born
Only to await their death
All hopes are forlorn
Until your very last breath

Someone tell me why
Even though one day we'll die
We still have to sigh
For every day of our life

Is there not a place
Free from pain and suffering
When I see your face
I wish to dance and to sing

A place filled with joy
With laughter and happiness
Where I can enjoy
No longer in loneliness

So come on aboard
We'll search for that special place
Where we're our own Lord
Utopia flouts time and space

Comments

[cookie_spiritz]

very nice.

[Athellen]

1st