Poor Dollie

• Artist: He Who Lurks
• Description: I had originally written this in a very different tone, with very different lyrics. Then I just had an urge to remake it, because I wasn't very satisfied with the original piece. This rendition feels much better to me, and it's honestly something I'm proud to say that I wrote.
• Date: 11/20/2008
• Tags: dollie broken suicide depression angst

Dollie's broken. Watch, she's weeping.
Here the darkness comes-a-creeping.
Full of sorrow, tears are streaming
down a face that's meant for beaming.

Dollie's broken. Help, she's bleeding.
Here the darkness comes-a-creeping.
Full of hurt, her blood is seething.
Too much pain, she just stopped breathing.

Dollie's broken. Hush, she's sleeping.
Here the darkness comes-a-creeping.
Eyes drift shut, her heart stops beating.
I wonder if and what she's dreaming.

Comments

[PizzaToGo]

hm... not bad 5/5

[Alibis of the Heart]

I like it a lot. There's diffrent ways to look at the meaning. Great job^^
If you don't mind could you check out some of my stuff? Thanks smile

[He Who Lurks]

O-o . . . no?

[Metroid Dread]

Geez, pent up sexual tension much?

Interesting poem.
Evokes odd images.

[He Who Lurks]

Ah, it would depend upon the circumstances. If I got full credit for it, then no. But if someone was trying to pass it off as their own material I'd want to beat someone.

I'm planning on making this into a song anyway. Just waiting until more inspiration comes my way. I'll have an updated version of this later when it happens, I suppose.

[Arctik Fox]

crrreeeepppyyyy but i love it. if u heard someone singing this would u be pissed?

[xSilentScreamsAreLoudestx]

wow. take that and apply it to an aspect of life, and you've got something.