Frustration,Anger,&Black Holes

• Artist: PoeticWindstorm
• Description: this is just somethin i wrote when i had to choose where i wanted to live after my rents divorce........i was lost and felt torn in two......theres more to the actual event.....but i just summed it up in my poem with my feelings.....please enjoy! :) and if u feel the need to comment or rate it.....plz go right ahead! :D
• Date: 04/26/2009
• Tags: frustrationangerblackholes

Ripping, tearing, shredding; at the remainder of my heart. Clawing and diggin deeper in it; its what my parents do; raking at my heart. Breakin and shaking it apart, into a sad...lonely, lonely heart. Its been molded and scolded, forming never-ending hole. With every piece gone; I shudder with, simplicity more than others. I'm forced to choose; now I'm being torn in two. scream

Comments

[xx-to teh e n d]

Grammar grammar grammar! Okay, I know it's wonderful, what if a publisher comes across this and SKIPS you thinking your pathetic? Just saying... 4/5

[1Akuri]

um pretty nice^-^

[Inyuashi 23]

Hmmm...Interesting, you go for darkness a lot and that is always something that is easy to write about when it's felt. Now then, I do like how you describe what's been done to your heart, you start off by making an interesting point, showing the reader what's being done... Always wonderful to do, it's something I do at times. It captures them every now and then, sometimes to points that they want to know "why?" overall 4/5