Gap in Perfection

• Artist: Gazma
• Description: Recently, I've had my eyes on this girl in my art class. She's decent to look at and I've been entertaining the idea of asking her out. The other day, though, I heard her having the most foul and inappropriate conversation right in the middle of class no less! As usual, I vented my anger at yet another imperfect woman in a poem. Love it or hate it. I don't really care.
• Date: 01/17/2010
• Tags: perfection love plight scream ugly

Raging screams
Pierce my soul
In perfection
I have found a hole
A pit of horrors
Beyond comprehension
Beautiful maidens
Beyond redemption
How dare you mar
Your robes of white
With ugly things
That provoke my plight
Filthy words
Stain your lips
Like the Earth
You're in an ellipse
Stuck on your path
As blind as bat
Once I longed
To hold you in my lap
Now no more
Those naive thoughts are gone
No more will I be singing
Your sad, little song
Like all the rest
You've cut me deep
Over this I will lose no sleep
I've come to expect this
From the world
For in it there is not one
Who can be my girl

Comments

[xBadfaith]

I think this poem needs to be more down to earth, it expresses emotions but there's too much focus on rhyming and not what your actually trying to say. Try NOT rhyming for once and see if it gets your point across better. Also it's "eclipse".

[live4the123456s]

Wow really good!!! But you know poems arnt always about ryhming but you are REALY good at it