Haikus

• Artist: cheddartwilightsept
• Description: Well i was bored the other night and writing in my journal and just started writing a bunch of haikus. I hope ya'll think they're any good. oh yeah they're in a 5-7-5 format. They mostly kinda skip around so just consider each of them seperate pieces. Thanks! (:L)
• Date: 02/16/2010
• Tags: haikus lies trust love

[1]
Deep like the ocean,
Binding like the sea,
Relentless is love.

[2]
Lies flying around
not knowing who I should trust
Losing faith in you.

[3]
you stand in sunlight,
Blinding me with your beauty
I fall into you

[4]
Darkness over me,
Why aren't you here for me now?
Too busy with her?

[5]
Standing in darkness,
You're still standing beside me,
Why dont I feel you?

[6]
Drawn by lust to you
You welcome me with humor,
What a cruel, sick, joke.

[7]
You feel like a wave.
Unstable but powerful,
Yet I still feel safe.

[8]
Can I still trust you?
After all the lies you fed,
Is it safe for me?

[9]
I love you sweetly,
You love me with great passion,
We love together.

Comments

[nbetweener]

I really like number 5. Really well-thought. Number eight needs 'fed' to become 'told'; it'd make a bit more sense.

[Mister Chicken]

Very nice! smile