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well I have a story I am still a begginer and I sorta got it of chobits and elfen lied if u like it tell me! Because I need support to help me write. rate it outta 10 plz? biggrin
well here we go.(I have no tittle can people give me ides it would be great k)



There was once a two young perscons. In their species they were called CHOBITS. One chobit was a girl named Sakura, and the other was boy named Negi. The two were experented on constantly. That is where everything went wrong.
They were both placed in different facilities. They gave one test that they knew that it would change them. But they needed to give them extra so it would work. They gave them both a shot of it in their arms then they made them both drink it.
Over night Negi began to get sick and he had a strange urdge of killing people. Sakura on the other hand she tried to escape, she also had an urdge to kill. She had tried to escape all night, but nothing worked. In the early morning the scientists went to chak on Negi. One of the doctor's name is Akane. Akane said to the scientits'' Release him the liquid has damaged him he may walk to get his strength. We must analyse him afterwards."
Some doctors went to release Negi out of the room. The rest went to check on Sakura was alright. She looked pale and her eye color changed from blue to green. The scientits started to back away.
Negi was released, but only to walk around. Fifteen doctors includingkane went with him. Negi looked at Akane sadly,"Where is Sakura.., what did you do to her!."
"She is unharmed, they are making sure she isn't ill." said Akane surley.
Negi had that urdge again, to kill. Negi stopped for a moment, he turned around and screamed"Stay away from me." his eyes flashed from gold to black. His hands flew directly on his head. Akane started to run towards Negi two of.The scientits held her back"Negi!" she cried out. The twelve other scientists contained Negi into a close by room. The scientists held him back to a wall and closed the door.

Meanwhile

Sakura smirked and said,"Scared eh?... You should be." She broke everything in her path. She ran fast and in a blink of an eye everyone was dead on the floor. Blood spilled everywhere. She stared up while smiling. The blood dripped on her face. She glanced at the dead bodies then left.
Sakura killed anyone that was in her path. One of the scientists blocked the front door and yelled,"Stop right there. You need gentle care. You must no..." With that Sakura killed her without a hesitate."You thought you could stop me? Hmph pathetic." She said with a smirk.
Negi said in a deep voice," You think you can keep me contained?"with that he killed everyone in his path. he headed outside, no one was there to stop him. Sakura to went outside and went into town. Negi headed for a town near Sakura.
Their eyes went normal. They didn't have that urdge to kill anymore. Negi collapsed 15 minutes after.Sakura was covered in blood but acted normal. Everyone gasped,one person was brave enough to ask her a place to stay. She nodded yes.
Only one little bot helped Negi. Negi soon woke up. The little boy backed away, Negi was also covered in blood."Here th...th...there is a...r..r..river." the little boy stutered. Negi washed the blood. "Do you know where Sakura is?" he said softly.
"No sorry I d..d..don't.."
Sakura washed herself up and went to the attic, her new room.She woundered what happened to Negi and is he alright.
Negi got up and headed toward where Sakura is. The boy stopped Negi,"No don't leave!" he said softly.
"I cannot stay, I must look for Sakura,"Negi said very confidently.
"Well then,...can I come with you?!" he said.
"Don't you have a family to stay with?"Negi said angrily.
"No..., my parents died. They died in the military. They were fighting for us. When I heard the news that they died I got tramatized. I was only 5 years old. In my parents will they both said that my grandparents have full custity over me. They are my only family I have left.My grandpa passed away two years ago bye old age... My grandma died 2 weeks leter by a heart attack. Now I only help the new comers." The boy said quietly.
"Alright you can come with me on one condition.You tell me your name,"Negi said with a slim smile.
The boy nodded and said,"My name is Yuki, thank you sir."
"Negi is my name Yuki." he laughed a little. Then he darted towrd where Sakura is at.
Meanwhile
Sakura snapped out of it,"Well, I need to rest up for tommorow!" Sakura started to close her eyes then...she grunted,"Or maybe I can wounder aruond."She got up and run outside."Finally fresh air!" she said happily.Her eyes startes to glow for some reason.Then she blacked out.
Flashback
Sakura saw herself kill...blood dripped on her face.She was smiling. Sakura backed away,"No...no that isn't me!" She screamed. Sakura heard a voice like hers,but harsh