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serenity mae's Journal Well this jurnel is well just a jurnel of my borein life that no one would really care to read.


serenity mae
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*i dont*
Heres a creepy poem i wrote let me kno if u like it or dont....or think it would be better if i changed somptin bout it!!!
ok here goes...

*some people feel the pain
i dont
i just feel the same
every cut and scrape
takes a memory i hate
some people feel the pain
i dont*

*maybe my heart's solid,
as cold as stone
cuz i feel no luv
even in my home*

*i look out my window
and on the street
are kids being happy
as they sit and eat
i wish i could have some of that,
people to care for me and
hole me tight
as i cry
if only if only
into the night*

*some people feel the pain
i dont
i just feel the same
every cut every scrape
takes a memory i hate
some people feel the pain
i dont
i just feel the same*


*as i lay on my floor
blood drips from mym arm
cuz theres no point in livein
anymore*



*some people feel the pain
i dont
i just feel the same*



-bye serenity mae



(plz dont steel it)
but tell me wut u think..i kno its a bit gothic so dont waste ur time tellin me that..thanx 4laugh






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shanlea90
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comment Commented on: Sat Jun 04, 2005 @ 05:03am
I like it. I used to relate, but I'm happier now. But I like it a lot, sounds like something I'd write. 4laugh


comment Commented on: Sun Jun 05, 2005 @ 02:16am
omg... that's so good! oops... Gabby Girl is calling me... wink



Taeliamika
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serenity mae
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comment Commented on: Sun Jun 05, 2005 @ 05:12am
some gurl wrote this to me bout my poem...do u agree?
illanocte Wrote:
Your also the furthest thing from a writer.

Try spelling words correctly, adding some imagery, et cetera. I hate having to say the same thing to all you crappy writers that clog up this forum.

Oh, and by the way- I don't know anyone in their right mind who would steal this.


comment Commented on: Tue Jun 07, 2005 @ 07:17am
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Try spelling words correctly, adding some imagery, et cetera. I hate having to say the same thing to all you crappy writers that clog up this forum.

Oh, and by the way- I don't know anyone in their right mind who would steal this.

That's just harsh. For someone to criticsize spelling that person can't spell etcetera. I liked it, personally.



Luminot
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