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A Demo of a Poem I Wrote... Before I put up this poem I just wanted to let you all know that this is only a demo(first draft) of the actual poem that I will eventually write later on...Now I know I have'nt writen anything in a few months but I hope you still enjoy them and have some thought and input on this right here.(Note:This isnt a recent poem....I think I wrote it about 4 months ago and currently this poem is untitled like alot of my demos are) Untitled (Written by:The Black Angel of Chaosx) You walk alone Not making a sound You think that theres no one like you around Becasue your heart is numbed with snow You let out the light and let darkness overflow It seems without her life isnt worth sticking around for... ~Write your self a will, say your goodbyes, and kill your self before you let any more of your pride die~

Posted by: The Black Angel of Chaosx Tue Jul 08, 2008 @ 11:48pm

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Commented on: Tue Jul 08, 2008 @ 11:50pm


	Please Read and Comment!!!!

Commented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 04:39am


	It was good, it made me wince a bit. The last line, however, had some flow issues. but I like what it says, you know? I need to write another poem.... .-.

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Commented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 06:46am


	Yeah, I thought the last line was pretty bad myself...I was even thinking of editting it out but hey its only a first draft....but im probably gona do it anyway....besides the main point still will get across.....and thank you for your comment Kanna mrgreen

Commented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 06:56am


	No problem. ^^ Anywho. I'm off to write a poem, maybe I'll post it tommorrow. but I'll be logging off in a sec for today.

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Commented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 07:03am


	Goodnight ^//^ smile

Commented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 08:25pm


	yeah i like it too ^-^ i always like your poems, your really good at writting them. blaugh and since i was stuck there in the plane for how long.. @_@ lol wrote songs/poems too XP so yeah... i'll send them to you if you want tho.. i need alot of work.. if you ever want me to.. attempt to help lol just ask. XP but i know you'll be able to finish it. ^-^

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Commented on: Wed Jul 09, 2008 @ 09:21pm


	I like that poem, you're very talented.

Commented on: Thu Jul 10, 2008 @ 06:18am


	Why thank you Kathy.....You guys keep me writing this stuff.....I value your words xd wink

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Commented on: Fri Jul 11, 2008 @ 04:02am


	biggrin Its good for a first draft..Keep up the good work!

Commented on: Fri Jul 11, 2008 @ 04:07am


	Thank you also Larisa.....I hope you all enjoy the final product!!!! biggrin

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Commented on: Sat Aug 02, 2008 @ 12:30am


	meh... not to sound like the bad girl.. but I would know when I see a good poem... and this one is too modern for any school grad to appreciate, you'd be better off making college friends.... by the way..you misspelled "writen" on my profile..please repost with a correction.. I don't allow illiteracy on my profile..

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