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Erdika's Story - chapter 3 is Up!
This is the story of Erdika the purple witch. I'm open to criticism, but if you don't like it, please explain why.
Chapter 2

"I tell you, they exist!" he exclaimed from his corner. "What nonsense you are talking about!" Answered his twin from the other corner. "Bessnakers are nothing but a fairytale!" "They do exist!" argued his brother. "I tell you, I've seen one with my own eyes!"
-"I'm sure your eyes fooled you, Ron." said the other. "You’re so full of those stories that this old man feeds you with, that you no longer can tell the difference between reality and your imagination!"
-"but it wasn't my imagination, Edward!" Ron insisted. "I've seen him! Tall, black hair. His skin was white as milk, his ears were pointed, and his eyes were piercing green with a cat's pupil."
-"are you sure this is what you saw?"
-"Definitely. And he looked at me, Ed. He smiled at me in a little, knowledgeable grin, as he knew I guessed what he was."
-"that proves nothing."
-"well, if you don't believe me, why can't we just visit the old mage and ask him?"
-"If you wish, but I'm sure he'll tell you it's just a fairytale."

They walked through the empty streets, lost in thought. Although they were Identical twins, they weren't really identical. First of all, there were the looks. While Ron kept his hair short, Edward had a ponytail which almost reached the middle of his back. But there was a more fundamental difference: while Edward was with his two legs on the ground and eager to find the truth behind mysteries, a tendency which led him to become a police detective, his twin was definitely a dreamer, looking everywhere for the enchanted, and, in contrary to his brother, eager to find the mystery behind the truth. This tendency had led him to the magical studies, to the old mage who lived in the forest not far from the city.
They knocked on the door. Immediately the door swung open and the old mage stood in front of them. "Welcome, young gentlemen!" He called with a wide grin and invited them in.
-"so, what brings you here?" he asked and offered them some tea. "Well..." said Ron, unsure. “My brother and I were arguing whether Bessnakers are real or not.”
-"They are just a fairytale, right?" said Edward hopefully.
The old man laughed. "Fairytale?" he chuckled. "When I was in your age I thought that too! But then I've met a young Bessnaker who proved me wrong. And do you know what Bessnakers are, young men?"
-"well..." said Edward. "I've heard they supposed to be evil immortal mages and witches who kill people and steal their bodies."
-"evil?!" laughed the mage. "Absolutely not! At least most of them, anyway. But you're right they are immortal."
-"so what are they?"
-"they are the spirits of men and women who died, but somehow regained control over their bodies. That probably what led to the belief they steal dead bodies. They hold enormous magical powers. Some say a few of them can even rejuvenate people who died! And it is nearly impossible to kill them, not even someone as powerful as me."
-"how one becomes a Bessnaker?"
-"on that question, my boy, can answer only a Bessnaker. And that remind me, Ron. I have a mission for you."
-"A mission?" Ron wondered. "What mission?"
The mage sighed. "Ever since I was young," he said, "I was looking for some powerful Bessnaker artifacts. I have found all of them but one. Erdibess's Dagger. I was disappointed many times, but now, after studying thoroughly, I am sure I've found where it supposed to be, but unfortunately I am too old to go to the quest by myself, and therefore, I ask you to retrieve the dagger for me."
-"who is Erdibess?"
-"One of the truly evil Bessnakers. She lived a few thousand years ago. There are many horrifying tales about her deeds... she was caught and imprisoned for eternity, but they say that wherever she is, so is her dagger. They say that the dagger has an amazing power. It is so powerful it can heal every wound and even bring dead to life, and that it is even powerful enough to kill a Bessnaker."
-"unbelievable..."
-"well, will you take this quest for me?"
-"of course, master!"
-"Good. Now here is the map I drew, where I think it lays."
-"okay... see you later, master!"
-"see you later... and good luck!"

As they exited the old castle, Ron saw him again. "Look there!" he cried. "Leaning on the tree! The Bessnaker I saw!"
Edward turned to look at that direction, but saw nothing unusual." what are you talking about?" he asked. "All I see is the most regular man." surprised, Ron turned to look again, but the Bessnaker vanished. Only the tree stood there.





 
 
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