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I made a song.... as you can see it's a working progress


Came out with my hands up, screamin' . . .. . . ..
Fighting all of my inner demons .. . . .. ..
Why you gotta bring me down . . .. . . .
This can't be my fight now . ... . .

The deciscion rests in your own hands,
If I may, have another life span..?
Spare me please, it wasnt my fault,
Because of you im locked in this vault.

You gave me no time to think,
My thoughts? They're starting to sink.
Down into the black abyss,
Oh, all the things im going to miss.

Help me escape from this place,
Only thing I need is to see your pretty face.
Please don't let me go,
Why do you treat me as your foe?






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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:21pm
Came out with my hands up, screamin' . . .. . . ..
Fighting all of my inner demons .. . . .. ..
Why you gotta bring me down . . .. . . .
This isn't my fight now . ... . .

had no time to turn around
i am unstoppable now
whyd you drag me into this?
i just cant handle it


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:23pm
oh i like! its going to be added!



Tainted_Symphonies
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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:25pm
AWESHUMM!~
Ill think of more.


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:26pm
okay!!
;D



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:28pm
Came out with my hands up, screamin',
Fighting all of my inner demons.
Why you gotta bring me down?
This isn't my fight now...

Had no time to turn around;
I am unstoppable now.
Why'd you drag me into this?
I just cant handle it...

You gave me no time to think,
My thoughts? They're starting to sink.
Down into the black abyss,
Oh, all the things im going to miss.


and nao there needs to be a hook.


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:29pm
yes a hook i needed
and maybe a chorus
i think we need a better word than now in the 2nd stanza... it sounds kinda weird



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:35pm
yeah.
maybe a whole nother part. because the way im thinking of the song, that just doesnt belong...

Uhh.

Came out with my hands up, screamin'
Fighting all of my inner demons
Why you gotta bring me down
This isn't my fight now

The deciscion [sp?dc] rests in your hands,
If I may, have another life span..?
Spare me please, it wasnt my fault,
Because of you im locked in this vault.

I had no time to think,
And all my thoughts? They're starting to sink.
Down into the black abyss,
Oh, all the things i am going to miss.

and then the hook.
i think that sounds better.


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:38pm
yes I like that better
And this doesn't have to start out the song... It just came to me and I wanted to write it down before it was lost.



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:40pm
yesh of course. btw i edited the one that i just posted.
sorreh.


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:42pm
okay ^^
ummm now a hook...i need to look up what that is because i forgot lol



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:49pm
its the main part of the song.
like in a little piece of heaven, the 'cause you had my heart at least for the most part'
yeah, thats the hook LOL.


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:50pm
yeah i just looked it up and it said it's what was important to a song's commercialing
what made it famous



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 09:59pm
better think of something catchy then...
:/
LOL
BTW. i like what you added, slightly too many words,
well
thats what i think.


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 10:00pm
Help me escape from this place,
Only thing I need is to see your pretty face.
Please don't let me go,
Why do you treat me as your foe?

okay well maybe there werent just the right words.
fer me,
if thats the hook, then theres my edit.



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 10:03pm
yeah i thought the same
I like your edit!
STUPID ONIONS MAKING ME SNEEZE!


commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 10:06pm
sneeze...?
i only cry sometimes.
LOL
except for the red ones, those dont do anything. LOL



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commentCommented on: Sun Jun 07, 2009 @ 10:09pm
yeah usually they make me cry but they were making me sneeze
it was weird


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