Mirishi · Community Member · Thu Feb 24, 2005 @ 04:25am
Very creative, Kira. Your stories are better than mine, but I do have some tips for you. Please, don't take what I say personally and you don't have to use what I say, I'm trying to help.
1. You should've ran a spell checker over it. I saw many mistakes in spelling. 2. The idea was great, but what does Elly look like? 3. The whole deal with the lady could've been a little longer and as could the whole chapter. At least another page.
As I said, I'm only trying to give tips to a fellow story writer. Don't get mad, only trying to help.