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Luthien's Epic
Another poem
Gold Plating
By Stephanie Cotton

the gold plating flakes off my ring,
once such a beautiful thing.
does love last forever
after the onset of routine?

once such a beautiful thing,
the sun is setting.
after the onset of routine,
run with me into the land of never.

the sun is setting
i can see the second star on the right.
run with me into the land of never,
i'm too afraid to take flight.

i can see the second star on the right,
once such a beautiful thing.
i'm too afraid to take flight,
no more gold plating on my copper ring.



.....ok, it's not the best, but i love it. my favorite parts are the allusions to Peter Pan. i think it works very well together and the ideas flow into each other quite nicely.
I do not know what this type of poem is called, but as you can see, it uses a pattern of repeated lines to create a dreamlike effect.

thanks for reading. ^.^

<3






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Skullz Mc Neal
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commentCommented on: Fri Jul 10, 2009 @ 03:00am
AWSOMELY KEW Z MATE! mrgreen totaly diggie the peter pan dreamlike effect too Z 3nodding i suck at writing poemz meself, but thats awsome. but you're awsome so its a no brainer that your poem would also be filled with awsomenessity azwell mate mrgreen


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