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book excerpt
Well ive been writing a book for almost 2 weeks but it seems i haven't told anybody so heres an exerpt from around page 50. It called "The Minister"



The thunder crashed in the dark night on the annaversary of the horrible deed. The minister walked down into the celar to go pray. While doing the prayers, he weeped his heart out. No congregation to lift the pain of his heartache. Later he would do the customary incantations. Has it really been four thousand years, he asked himself. It seems like mere seconds ago. He can still rember the cries of pain coming from his sister as the uncontrolable flames ingulfed her. Burning his sister to the ground. He slammed his fist on the table in blind furry. His eyes grew slitted and red. his vision darkened, and his thought fogged. He no longer rembered what he was doing. All that he knew was he was mad, and someone would taste the wrath of his hatred...


AND MAKE SURE YOU COMMENT!!!!!






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SukiSohma
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commentCommented on: Sat Mar 31, 2007 @ 01:48am
I like it. It's all mysterious, but it sounds sad.....
It sounds like the Minister guy is going to kill someone...awesome!
Let me know when you're done, I'd like to read it.


commentCommented on: Sat Mar 31, 2007 @ 03:19am
I actually think that Paris called first.



vampire_at_heart
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Ravanum
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commentCommented on: Sat Mar 31, 2007 @ 05:46am
Sounds like a good plot

a few spelling errors but thats ok. I would like to read it. Sinse i have some experience with this stuff, you could email me what u have and then i could proof read it and help u out.


commentCommented on: Sat Mar 31, 2007 @ 03:54pm
Thnx. Most of that is spelled right in the actual thing, I was typing really fast.



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RoXy_hEaRt0807
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commentCommented on: Sat Mar 31, 2007 @ 03:59pm
I really like it. The imagery is great. 3nodding I really like the last statement...it's mysterious and leaves the reader wanting more. 4laugh I'm going to an arts school next year for literary arts and trust me, they would heart this.


commentCommented on: Sat Mar 31, 2007 @ 04:34pm
lol. thnx.



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ichibobo
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commentCommented on: Sun Apr 01, 2007 @ 08:17pm
better than anything i could write emo lolz i like it ^_^ so you better remember i dibbed 1st reads !!! or atleast firstish dibs sweatdrop


commentCommented on: Mon Apr 02, 2007 @ 03:11pm
lol. don't worry, i rember. though I bet anything my mom will want to read it first.



vampire_at_heart
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ichibobo
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commentCommented on: Tue Apr 03, 2007 @ 03:18pm
ill steal it from her and photocopy it or something ninja with my mad ninja skills


commentCommented on: Sun Apr 08, 2007 @ 05:28am
you mean skizzelz



vampire_at_heart
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Hughs_Fan_Girl
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commentCommented on: Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 09:51pm
Okay, I defintily get to read it first! domokun As a fellow writer I need to know my competition. mrgreen So I get first dibs!


commentCommented on: Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 09:56pm
ha. your way outta ur league. xd



vampire_at_heart
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Hughs_Fan_Girl
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commentCommented on: Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 09:59pm
How am I "way out of my league"? What's that suppose to mean?! sweatdrop


commentCommented on: Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 10:04pm
that means im a better writer than u. xd



vampire_at_heart
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Hughs_Fan_Girl
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commentCommented on: Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 10:06pm
Well that's just mean! cry Besides, you've never read anything of mine. I bet I can write as well as, if not better, then you ever could! xp Am I right? ...Anybody??? ... sad


commentCommented on: Sun Apr 15, 2007 @ 05:18am
i was jk.



vampire_at_heart
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ichibobo
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commentCommented on: Sun Apr 15, 2007 @ 02:31pm
googies 2 good of a writer she got all 5s on that test thingy, but shes also a bad writer cause she totaly ditched the book she was writing that i was reading crying


commentCommented on: Mon Apr 16, 2007 @ 02:53am
I lost this one in FL but its ok cuz I wanted to change it anyway.



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ichibobo
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commentCommented on: Wed Apr 18, 2007 @ 02:57am
i still get 1st on it


commentCommented on: Sun Apr 29, 2007 @ 02:48pm
That's really good...I want to read when you're done. Well, after Paris and whoever else



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