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Christmas is fun,
Christmas isn't done.
Christmas is great,
So we should appreciate.
If you don't act nice,
You're heart might be as cold as ice.
Hope you like Christmas like me,
Because you will be filled with glee.
But one thing i know,
Christmas isn't about the marshmallow.
It's about spreading holiday cheer,
to every girl and boy each year.
- by flare saiyan |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/08/2008 |
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- Title: christmas
- Artist: flare saiyan
- Description: just threw together
- Date: 12/08/2008
- Tags: christmas xmas holiday
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Legendary Pirate Plasma - 07/14/2009
- I have to agree with Renee's criticisms. It can be fun to a point, but it also looks rather simplistic. I think that, with a wider use of vocabulary, you could make it a million times better. Not only that, but poetry doesn't need to rhyme at all. Better luck next time and I wish you the best on your next poem!
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- Renee the Rabid Squirrel - 12/24/2008
- Well, the rhyming couplets are fun...but they're a bit on the simple side. Try to make it fresher, explore vocabulary. Also, don't use cliches like 'cold as ice' or 'holiday cheer to every girl and boy each year'. It's too overdone. You can do better. I hope.
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- Akienna - 12/24/2008
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It reads like you just threw it together.
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- ggcga - 12/16/2008
- omg are you the old holiday dark elf cause ur NOT fooling me so stop adding things to the arenas ok cause ur filling up my info list and i DON'T like it cause i need to know what is going on with my gaia and i cant have you useing up all the space and your profile is so lame ya i went there.
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