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snow is everywhere and the tree look sad.
leave's have fallen and the grass has died.
finally snow has covered the ground.
snow forts are big built, and snow ball war brake out.
children laughing and screaming with joy.
light flash at night, bells ring in the frosty air.
all is quite and nothing stirs, not even a mouse.
santa comes and give out presants to the kids.
the reindear snort and sly through the air.
as morning comes children run down stairs to find
presants all around.
girls and boys shout with joy,
parents gather round and smile.
pictures being taken, wrapping paper flying.
santa smiles and return home,
another years successful.
- by rayne the vampire hottie |
- Holiday Poem Contest
- | Submitted on 12/11/2008 |
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- Title: santa
- Artist: rayne the vampire hottie
- Description: santa comes to town and give the chidlren presants. the snow covering the ground.
- Date: 12/11/2008
- Tags: winter
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Comments (4 Comments)
- inking the world - 06/13/2009
- I think it is different but there a few changes and spelling errors but its nice
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- lorsky15 - 02/19/2009
- cute..................
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- xips - 12/19/2008
- Positive criticism on a few errors... you forgot the s at the end of a lot of words and mis-spelled others but I think it's an ok poem otherwise. good job 3*
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- Bounty Hunter Toshiro - 12/17/2008
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GREAT POEM.
not to imaginative.
but it get's the point across.
7/10
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