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Winter Beauty
When it's winter in the forest
and my breath hangs in the air,
The snow will crunch beneath my feet
and glisten in the air.
The stars at night light up my forest
so I never walk alone;
It's clear and beautiful
in the forest I call home.Listening
on a winter's day;
it has so much to say.
It brings with it new ideas that
ordinarily wouldn't come my way.
Stillness - broken only by the whistle of a
far-off train or the ticking of the clock;
Stillness is when my mind and I never
feel the need to talk.
Eyes see more; thoughts are new;
wonder plays a part;
For in the stillness I hear those things
that are deep within my heart.
- Title: winter beauty
- Artist: Kurama34
- Description: it was hard to think. please comment.
- Date: 12/13/2008
- Tags: winter beauty
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Comments (7 Comments)
- mizuno111 - 02/26/2011
- awesome
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- A Lack of Existence - 07/26/2009
- I can't help but love this, nice job! ^^
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- xSnOwBoIx - 05/23/2009
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good nice poem
keep going ;D
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- Cottoncandyocbra3 - 02/22/2009
- This is like my "Winter" poem" Only better. Nice job 3.5/5.
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- jm20_for_the_couse - 02/18/2009
- its nice but rhming a free verse is not a good idea but still good
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- Mullugutherum - 01/19/2009
- It's not bad, but I have a couple of issues with it. You're trying too hard to make it rhyme and the rhythm becomes awkward towards the end. The 2nd and 4th lines are too much like each other for my taste. I like the lines 'The stars at night light up my forest/So I never walk alone' and 'Eyes see more; thoughts are new;/wonder plays a part' (although I think you might have meant 'thought ANEW).
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- bboy19952008 - 01/18/2009
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a good poem i give it 5/5
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