I have no interest in you.

• Artist: Julia Dream
• Description: Words can be cruel.
• Date: 10/29/2008
• Tags: have interest

She is a porcelain doll,
Shattering to pieces

With every uttered syllable,
her faith in love decreases

With every single word
that tears another seam

in the stitches holding her together,
And tethering her dream

Of kisses, hugs, and warmth;
"One plus one" is through

With one tiny, simple sentence
That splits her heart in two.



And this little girl left broken
Is cold, harsh proof some words
are better left unspoken.

Comments

[B-B-B-BeanCup]

don't waste the taste don't force the rhyme

[Princess Aqua Moon]

this is a great poem b/c alot of people can connect to it and good luck

[a peace remaining]

I can understand if you don't like free verse, but this format seems too tight for the poem. The three lines at the bottom really throw it off. If you like traditional forms better, try a villanelle! Dylan Thomas has a good one you can look for. I don't want to just say that "This is nice" and leave it at that-- poetry is meant to grow with the writer, and if you just abandon it now, well, it would be a waste.

[Julia Dream]

I actually kind of think free verse tends to be pretentious and annoying, so that certainly isn't going to happen.

To everyone: thanks for the comments. (:

[A. Nonny Mouse]

You have talent, that is certain, however this poem is still below what you are capable of. The rhyme scheme is predicable and the format doesn't do the idea justice. Try this in free verse, please. Also, the idea of a doll with a breaking heart had been done before, and so why not tweaking the idea a little? You have a powerful image-- extend it. 2/5

[YourLovelyBear]

I really like this poem. Sadly, this has happened to me a lot. It speaks of a rejected melencholic soul. Take a look at my poem, please. "Little Teapot"

[The Darke Assassin]

That was very heart felt. I have similar feelings I'm going through. I like a guy but he does not want a girlfriend. I told him how I felt and all he said was "I know." Typical male.