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Lost in the World
It’s too dark outside
For her to see.
She is crouched to hide
Behind the nearest tree.
She can feel the rapid pounding
Of her broken heart.
How is it still beating, she wonders,
When my love and I are apart?
She shouldn’t have hoped.
She shouldn’t have tried.
But it used to be so easy
And now it felt like she had died.
She needed a guide
To lead her away from the tears,
Stinging her eyes
Like twice sharpened spears.
They didn’t intend
For it to go like this.
But it did,
In the end.
And now everything’s empty,
Including her heart.
And, thinking back to the start,
She knew she had not been smart.
But she wouldn’t have those days,
In any other ways.
She missed the times when
They would lay in the sand,
The sky holding their gaze,
Hand in hand…
He had so many ways to phrase
The words “I love you.”
To her it had all been new,
But, she definetly knew,
She loved him too.
from the author of the previously submitted Unspoken Message
- Title: Lost in the World
- Artist: Nikki4815
- Description: As it says at the bottom of the poem, I am the same person who submitted Unspoken Message, another poem that was very succesful in the arenas. At the bottom of this poem, there is a link to it. Please leave comments, and I am open to creative critism. PM me if you wish. This is a mule account. PM me if you would like my real name.
- Date: 12/07/2008
- Tags: lostintheworld
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Nobilissima - 12/08/2008
- ^^ You really have a gift for rhythm! (:0 I wish I could make everything flow perfectly like you can...) : ) I like the last paragraph the most! It's very sweet.
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- Blaesse - 12/08/2008
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you're a very talented poet. but just like the last time, you change your rhyme scheme. i have a challenge for you, i would like for you to try writing a poem that focuses more on rhythem than rhyme. i would like to see how it works out. 4/5
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- iCandii-Chan - 12/07/2008
- Very Talented! :] 5/5
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- Aziin Z - 12/07/2008
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i read ur other poem, its wonderful
and this one is amzing, stupendous! - Report As Spam
- darkangel9194 - 12/07/2008
- Really good, 5/5 for this one.
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- Rook219 - 12/07/2008
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It's beautiful
I love your work. - Report As Spam
- Xx_BrokenCrystal_xX - 12/07/2008
- This is beautiful, like your last peom. I love it. SO sad and awsoem, it fits my way.
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