A Child In Time Alone

• Artist: Cottoncandyocbra3
• Description: Something chillingly dark
• Date: 02/05/2009
• Tags: child time alone

A child alone in time
paid to disfigure his aspirations
Who shall admit to this crime?
enacted in desperation,

Full of deep pain and self doubt
days viciously attacking belief
his inner self is screaming out
for some form or shape of relief,

For this pent up, maligned aggression
weaving tear tapestry in the eyes
panic attack triggered from repression
he's nothing special, why does he try?

A failure in his own eyes and words
falling out of social favor
the sides of emotion draw their swords
the sweet taste of hope's blood to savor,

Worries over sparse details of a fantasy
something never to occur
wishing for depression amnesty
a still frame of pain to denote symbolic rapture,

Fearing a false situation which has no merit
as the dream shall come to fruition nowhere
this inexplicable stress, he cannot bear it
all he asks is for someone to truly care,

What a laughably whimsical notion!
to care is to truly exist, yet we are only lies
drowning in the lovely ocean
to hell be damned the soul who tries,

Ignoring all the prior advice
no matter how logically sound
skating too many times on thin ice
in these broken dreams his corpse was found.

Comments

[Casca 7]

First I was going to comment on your poem, then I read your backlash. Hun, there is a difference between honesty and being crass. Anyway, on to the poem. It was a bit angsty for me. In the second to last stanza you tried to get a bit philosophical, but turned it into something so unreal and unreachable. How do lies drown? If we are lies, then we exist as lies, but if we don't exist then we can't drown. O.o Anyway, it still reads like a journal entry, so keep working. 3/5

[white_angel_sweetheart]

u kno wat when u commented on mine mine was soooooooooooo much better then this crap OH AND YES EVERYONE HAS SOMETHING UNIQUE ABOUT THEM WE ARE NOT ALL THE SAME!!! u know wat u are stupid and not worth it!!

[faux_fur_rabbit]

Boring, so, so boring. May be creative but sorry, it's boring. You need to ad life to it, to every poem you do. Even if it is the saddest poem ever created.

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Hello mister petty.

[iTakiz]

boring i could barely stay asleep reading it if only i could put 0/5

[whitejade13]

I'm commenting again because I read the poem again and then I read these peolple's comments."The Final Raider" what said was total BS. So, yeah. And "Plague899" no, I'm not even going to go there....... and, and, whatever.