Idioglassia.

• Artist: Louise Brooks
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• Date: 07/15/2008
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She wakes up in the morning devoid of animation.
school contorts her body she wishes for salvation.

These words that leave her mouth startle those around.
She jokes about the macabre your smiles make her frown.

She understands the working of the world so much atlas shares her burden.
don't try to soothe her for she does'nt know she's hurting....

all these people who gave their adoration.
They gave her a chance & all she caused them was frustration.

If only I could only show you the girl behind those eyes.
I guess I'm not a human if all I do is cry....

Just before she lost her grip people gave her their hands.
she climped back up and looked at them ; no longer for this land.

The only few that cared for the girl evaporated from her view.
she looked into her watery image and knew just what to do.

My language might offend or maybe make you shudder.
But some of us look to the stars even in the gutter.

Comments

[SilvertongueSagittarius]

im impressed. not many good poets actually post here. i enjoyed this. excelent and original rhymes. you get a 4 because the flow is a tad off. be proud though. i've never voted higher than a 3 before

[Atheshya]

You are, apperently, extremely good at poetry. More amazing rhymes here - almost every rhyme, actually. My only suggustion is to seperate each line into many - even though it does seem like the pairs of two lines is a stylistic thing, it doesn't work. I rarely give a full five stars, but this deserves it and a favourite.

[Master Woody258]

wow

[FlowerHose]

Wow, this is a very beautiful poem!
It is well written and reaches to my heart.

[xXxXxbabexXxXx]

very nice, i have a poem similar to yours
its not as deep but still a poem non the less

[Dirminxia]

Very well writen, a true piece of art