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I can't beleave I fell in love with you..
You lied and said "I love you"
It was all just a lie wasn't it?
You love her more?..
Well the damage is already done and Im not going back
You call me names and that makes me cry
You say "I love you" and that breaks my heart
Please stop saying that because..
I know its all a lie
- by scrumptious dumpling |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/15/2008 |
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- Title: Those Words
- Artist: scrumptious dumpling
- Description: Just a little poem type thing I wrote one day. I put it on meh profile too. It was alittle different so I decided to change some of it. Yeah ^^; Soo..I hope you like it? ^.^
- Date: 07/15/2008
- Tags: words
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Comments (5 Comments)
- Essence of Play-Doh - 01/11/2009
- Tsuki Kurai is right... You repeated the ''I love you'' and lies part. neutral Im sorry.
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- Tsuki Kurai - 07/15/2008
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I agree with xx1crazyc.
Also, the vocab is mediocre, use a thesaurus.
Its very repetitive as well, this makes it boring. remember, SHORT IS BETTER THAT REPETITIVE. - Report As Spam
- scrumptious dumpling - 07/15/2008
- Oh ok! ^.^ Thankies!
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- eR-gEr89 - 07/15/2008
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awww im so sorry! i feel the same way! but been there more then you more then you! im sorry!
take care! n if you need anyone to talk to im here!
take care
--joshi - Report As Spam
- cabbage_patch_doll_xoxo - 07/15/2008
- If you would have kept your feelings more mysterious it could have been better but you describe in this poem as the writer is pertaining to herself and lonesome regret
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