Simplea Plea

• Artist: XxSahn_SupakuxX
• Description: A song I wrote for my friends band.
• Date: 07/16/2008
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U ever have the feelin that u were constantly watched/Trapped in a cage under constant clock/U feel ur only ecsapes is to stop their tick-tock/But in here we all are kept under pad and lock/In our face keepin us in check like moss on a rock/But if we retaliate we run in fear of their glocks/And when some of us die their the ones in shocl/ X

X My simple is is that u follow my/Back to a time when livin was free/But now ever turn we make theirs a "little" fee/ So c'mon people jus follow me X

It's times like this that we need a leader stronger than a wayward breeze/So that we're not like rats takin poisined cheez/ A child like me please hear my pleas/ So that when you get hear uwon't be overtakin by greed/Still we strive for the completeness of our needs/And still we defend our life and pride till our fists bleed/X


X My simple is is that u follow my/Back to a time when livin was free/But now ever turn we make theirs a "little" fee/ So c'mon people jus follow me X


And now it's times like these when we will refus to flee/Arms cocked back/And we are the one listening to their "simple" plea/Must look back/At those that they've slain for a un-noble cause/We now fight/And we remain fighting until ou battle is won/from the light/Our time is now we must unite as one X

repeat chorus x3

Comments

[Ryan Russell]

Well, I can honestly say that it is difficult to judge lyrics, and harder to write them.
That being said, I would not expect less of a work from my 13-year old brother.
My first suggestion would be to not try so hard to rhyme the lines. I would suggest spending more time on the meaning and developing the concept of the song, rather than simply rhyming. Unless, of course, your friend is a rapper. In which case this song would fall just around average.