See his eyes

• Artist: ZuuZu
• Description: ..........
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: insane

See his eyes, they're sweet and blue.
Hear his voice with sweetness, too.
Look at his heart, feel the pain.
Look at his mind, he's insane.

Find the blooded tears he shed.
Hear the cruel words she said.
Blood has remained in his mind.
The day he left life behind.

After death he took the phone.
Gladly now, she was alone.
She smiled and came without a word.
Unready to face vampire's world.

One cold smile, a fatal kiss.
Forever took her life of bliss.
The vampire has avenged his tears.
the insane boy forever cheers...

Comments

[Miku~Noaru]

This is giving me Joker meets My Chemical Romance in like a small town mall, y'know? Where like the only thing to do in the small town is to go out into the fields or go out to the mall to the three stores. IIIIII was a little lost. I didn't know there was a vampire element until you said the word vampire. There's a little bit of a stumble on the rhyme with word with world, but I get what you're trying to get to. But I hope you're still writing and being creative. . .2/5.

[Paige Teh Stalker]

I really do like this the whole consept is great- I would like to see more

[BitterYetSweet]

great job rhyming. Nice poem.

[pookster96]

that is a great poem it describes alot in alot of ppeoples lives post some more

[ninja-kyoko-chan]

that's amazing