Enter my Mind

• Artist: plsnofascists
• Description: Um, this is a original piece by me, and it's my first entry in a arena. I'm trying to get people to notice it. P.M. me if you think it's good!!
• Date: 07/23/2008
• Tags: mind philosophies

Come enter my mindset,
Let's see what you can find,
Poems, thoghts, and dreams,
Will start to intertwine,
You'll see many colors, green and blue and yellow,
You'll see many feelings, from serious to mellow,
But the most important thing you'll find is my philosophy,
That everyone is different, including you and me.

Comments

[sexey tiney]

at first i thought it was going to be realy gay or somthing. but it wasnt it was realy and i mean realy good. ad i looking forward for any other poems you my put in the arena.

[RicaMaker]

This is good. I enjoyed the message and the general flow of the poem. Even though it could be longer, it doesn't end like it's not finished so I think it's okay. I really liked it though. biggrin

[Atheshya]

Ooooh. This is good. Why do I say that, you ask? Because this poem is not cliched. Because all of the rhymes are not painfully forced. 'cuase you didnt write liek this The biggest problem here, of course, is that it's a little short...
I'll go with four stars on this one.

[Aereian]

Ohh, I love it! ^^ Don't like those last two lines though... =/ A bit of an awkward rhyme there. Ah well. 3/5 stars. :3