forever is overrated

• Artist: UNKNOW dude ii
• Description: hey if u guys cood tell meh wat u think of dis poem, or any of my others, it wood b greatly appreciated =)
• Date: 07/25/2008
• Tags: theoverlordofamsterdam forever overated

Into oblivion
into the unknown
u left me in the open
for my sorrows to grow

forever together
thats what we'd say
but u left me wide open
and put my heart in the fray

forever in a coma
forever asleep
my past comes to haunt me
your memory makes me weep

my heart is broken
my soul is dead
you've taken a gun
and put it to my head

time to run away
and leave you behind
forever together?
hmm not this time

Comments

[Little-luv-hearts]

I didn't really read it, but it's still good. I like the first bit.

[UNKNOW dude ii]

being in a coma/dying is a medaphor, 4 how i feel on the inside

[xXxDemonic_ImpressionxXx]

uhmm... i kinda like it cuz it rhymes and make sense alittle but i think you should make it more clear cuz your bouncing back and forth to being in a comma to awake and dying.