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One More
One More touch.
One More kiss.
Three More words I LOVE U.
You took the pain i held in so deep.
All my wishes.
All my dreams come true all becouse of you.
But it seemed so real.
The feelings we shared.
Now they seem thire driffting away.
So touch my face.
Kiss my lips and,
Say I LOVE YOU .
One More time before u say GOODBYE. sweatdrop
- by browneyeangle |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 08/02/2008 |
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- Title: one more
- Artist: browneyeangle
- Description: its about doing one more thing befor saying goodbye
- Date: 08/02/2008
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Ms Make Me Smile - 08/02/2008
- i agree with fistofsteel but i like the ryming thing and i think it is good so 5/5
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- fistofsteel - 08/02/2008
- I like it but its too simple. You can add more of your feelings to this whole 'one more' concept. But I could be falling into subconscious favortism. 3/5.
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- aimike3 - 08/02/2008
- hmph, a little random at parts, not that I'm saying poems are meant to rhyme, but there wasn't any rhythm. 4/5.
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- aikirin - 08/02/2008
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your poem make me crying... i'm so stupid!!
it's so good...
5/5 - Report As Spam
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