questions of the heart

• Artist: laxbrains88
• Description: unfinnished poem tell me what u think im open to criticism
• Date: 08/29/2008
• Tags: questions heart

why must love be a constant mystery?
why can those i might love never love me?
what traps my heart?
it longs to be free!

why must my heart's quest know no end?
why will it's cage not break or bend?
why must it be teased?
again and again

to see ur face a jouous curse
to hear your voice a quenching thirst
the greatest joy
and sarrow worst

the greater the treasure the higher the price
the warmth of fire the chill of ice
though there's nothing as bad
as love is nice

Comments

[Lilevil21]

great i can kinda relate to that 5/5

[Midnight648]

very nice
i like it alot (^_^)

[atsyrk]

I liked it 4/5. If you added more detail and cleaned up the spelling and grammar, it would be better, but its still awesome. if you don't mind, look at my poems. i wouldnt mind criticism. 4/5

[Til Death and Beyond]

wow i love it!