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• Artist: mexicantacos2003
• Description: TITLE: if you dont shoot it how am i supposed to hold it??
  
  The title is actually from a song by a Damien Rice song.
  I hate the fact that I have to choose a category if i dont know what this kind of writing is.
• Date: 10/08/2008
• Tags: random different wierd

i only think when i want what i want to think

dont play with words cause friction where i go
your childish manners rip my ripe roots from birth
what will happen if nothing happens and you smiled?
no one can tell but no one truly cares what i mean
tune your ears to tears of terror, and run

Comments

[omnomNOM de Plume]

I think a little more punctuation and clarification are needed. The lines are good, and it flows well, but what is going on here? What is the story or the point you're trying to get across? It might be a bit clearer if you add more to it.