Smile Again

• Artist: l Princess Sugar l
• Description: Ok, so I think I should add more but I dont have much time to write anymore so heres what I have so far, comment so I kno how to make it better though, please? lol
• Date: 10/19/2008
• Tags: smile again

Can I smile again
Now that your gone
The moment it began
I knew it was wrong
But for some reason
I couldn't let you go
Though it was like my life's deadly season
Not acknowledging that our relationship was only so-so
You took you heartbreaking leave
Corrupted tears fleeing me
Escaping me like a cold breeze
I put you and our memories behind me
Never again to turn my head
Living life without you
These new tears have yet to shed
I could have done better than you
No longer traumatized by your act
I will find someone new
Keeping my fragile heart intact
Because I'm happier without you

Comments

[l Princess Sugar l]

omg thanx that was helpful! i just have to get time to rewrite it, i was sorta in the middle of class when I worte this and being in the front row doesnt help much lol

[Ms Make Me Smile]

i thought it was very good,the thing i would say is that i think it would be better with alot more emotion and there wasnt really any rythm to it,which i think is a pretty big problem. i get what you were trying to do and the concept is very good and if you exclude what i said then it is very very good.so i think if it was rewritten it would be even better.3/5

[sezuko]

its really good beyond words

[Lex2442]

i love it its great. lol i dont liek my poem i wrote though it was easy but not good.