Lost in the Dark.

• Artist: Uzumaki Bolt
• Description: Just something I took 10 minutes to write in Literature class for a school presentation.
  Hope you understand what the poem is expressing~
  :3 Enjoy.
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: lost dark

Lost in The Dark,
Blinded my Sorrow;
What I need..Is a heart to borrow.
Mine is crushed and left with hate,
I want it back, in a healthy state..

Cold and Lonely,
I lay my head,
I'm Bleeding Love that glows bright red;
But soon enough that glow goes away,
Then Happiness is lost from the day.

Consumed with Hate... & Neglect,
Because of Her... I'd reject,
All the Feelings I have for all;
But In the end I always fall...
for all the trick She's played on me,
Is this the truth of what I'll be..?



~ J.F.~

Comments

[Zlae]

I too love how you rhyme. It's beautiful. 5/5.

[nighthammer17]

I loved it up until the last stanza. You have a beautiful rhythm and rhyme pattern set up, and the last stanza doesn't mesh very well with the rest of the poem.
Very good though.

[Uzumaki Bolt]

Ah, thankyou n__n

[tksunshine93]

Wow.... That's very emotional and quite beautiful in a sad way....Well done! Keep it up!

[Uzumaki Bolt]

I know you didn't ...But now ya do =D

[Slurpee-kun]

didn't*

[Slurpee-kun]

i didnlt know u could write poems :/