Used Love Left Behind

• Artist: michelleabelle16
• Description: A love that seemed perfect, seemed real. He was the one, or so I thought. He ended up leaving, moving on, and all i had left was misery... but its not the end. For I know, the one who is perfect, is still out there.
• Date: 12/01/2008
• Tags: used love left behind

We walked down the street together one night
When you held my hand, it felt so right
I felt a connection, a jolt, a spark
Especially when you kissed me good night in the park

I thought we would be together forever
But now I know I was just a dog on a tether
You led me to believe that you would stay
But for you to leave there would be no delay

After our date that glimmered like a dream
You moved on to the next girl in line, it would seem
At first my heart sank from being hurt and used
To see other people, I steadily refused

Soon I came to realize I didn't love you at all
Only your smile was what made my heart crawl
From that moment on I decide you weren't worth the tears
When all you did was trample on my worst fears

What I thought was a spark was actually a chill down my spine
Whenever you spoke a captivating line
Someone out there is perfect for me
The one I thought you were supposed to be

A man who will love me and not move along
Is calling my name lovingly clear and strong
So to this voice that pulls my heart strings
I will search for and see what each new day brings

Comments

[iiBAMF Soul]

im srry

[michelleabelle16]

I appreciate all the praise and criticism. The criticism is not bad either. Those are the things wich help me grow, and I would rather hear your honest opinion than a buttered-up lie, so thank you everyone smile

[sandyluv]

ooh shut it nakedjack!!! she did great!!! it's about her love life which you apparently dont have..

[Only Becca]

Um, can I say the words generic and cliche without being flamed? Good wording, I guess, but what teenage girl has not written something nearly identical to this? I know that I've written poems that are cliche, but the thing is that I don't enter them in the arenas because I realize that they're just that - cliche. Try to branch out a bit. It wasn't a bad poem, it's just that the subject matter is too superficial and generic. 2/5 for lack of originality. (NakedJack was being a bit harsh.)

[iFuffie]

really good ^^

[NakedJack]

Wow, who couldn't have wrote this? Its just not good writing, does not deserve 5/5 by any stretch of the imagination.