my abyss

• Artist: M z C a R m E n IV
• Description: she tore me apart and this was all that was left of me
• Date: 12/09/2008
• Tags: abyss

my heart is torn
no one can hear me
i am alone
Fear and rage are in me
I call out for help to the one i care for and she turns her cheek
left in this darkness not able to speak
hoping someone can help me in my dark form
hoping someone will give me at least a small amount of a mourn
my love is gone and my heart is full of darkness
no one can release me from this abyss

Comments

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Yes, it is not bad. I feel you could use better word choice in places. Needs work. 2.75/5.

[Ninja osaka orchid]

im srry cry *hugs u*

[hey girl hey XD]

cool...needs a little work, but i like it! keep writing!!!

[II FL3X II]

YEAH!!!