Bloodlust and lies

• Artist: Caleco
• Description: isometimes liars have to know how you feel about them (you know who you are)please coment. if you find any mistakes, please point them out so i can fix them
• Date: 01/10/2009
• Tags: bloodlust lies death dead pain

The scent fills the air,
I know it’s unfair,
But it’s there crime,
So now it’s their time.
Lies through their teeth,
Their blood they cant keep.
It will all be mine
By the end of time!
I will steal it all
And let bodies fall.
They don’t deserve it!
Not one single bit!
So I’ll drain them dry
And watch them die!
I’ve grown tired of lies,
So they’ll drop like flies.
In the end I’ll be happy
I’ll stop being snappy.
I’ll finally be sane,
And out of pain.
My craving fulfilled
And those liars killed.

Comments

[Marionette_Mentation]

Umm all in all it was pretty good but i think you focused too much on the rhyme rather than the emotion and effect it would leave on others... but still good! ^.^

[Sofie_Pofy]

Loved the poem =)

[jekoy]

please change the spelling of ur word "there".. i think it should be "their".. that is if you mean,in the 3rd line,it is their crime, not there crime..and also all of the other there's.. but nice poem..