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The snow falls lightly
from the sky to the ground.
On this winter day it's so quiet
no one is around.
My lonliness has found me
again on this winter day.
I'm far away from home
I cannot find my way.
On this winter day
I know not what I see
for everything before me
is unfamiliar to me.
On this winter day
I'm in a place unknown
God, I feel so cold.
I am all alone.
- by whitejade13 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 01/10/2009 |
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- Title: On This Winter Day
- Artist: whitejade13
- Description: Well.......... yeah, so here you go.
- Date: 01/10/2009
- Tags: winter alone
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Comments (6 Comments)
- vampiress_of_the_dark - 01/17/2009
- lovin all ur poems
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- Farrelei - 01/11/2009
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I like it a lot ^^
The only thing I can suggest is, in the third stanza, you use 'me' at the end of the third line, and again at the end of the fourth, so that fourth line just sounds a little off.
Other then that, it's beautiful. - Report As Spam
- airwonder - 01/11/2009
- it was amazing. was was touching and it got to me. which i love about it.
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- Cottoncandyocbra3 - 01/10/2009
- Another amazing poem. Very lonely sounding... I say this again: I wish you didn't have to feel that way.
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- supergirl10895 - 01/10/2009
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Do not feel alone! I'll be there to say, "Do you need a hand, ma'dam, On this winter day."
^_^ very touching poem! - Report As Spam
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