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You, girl who is unhappy.
Yes, you. One who gave up the one who loved you.
The wanna-be emo who never smiles.
I hate you.
Yes, you. You who plays innocent and hides behind sarcastic comments.
Yes, you who would rather read then talk to your boyfriend.
I want you to leave.
You who says i need to let go, but what do you know?
You, the one who has never been dumped, never felt this way.
The one who has found another's lost love.
You who wears a blank face and long shoes.
I hate you.
Yes, you. i hate who you pretend to be,
Or maybe really are.
I hate what you did to me.
I hate what you did to him.
Yes, him. The one who loved you.
You have lost.
Yes, you lost.
- by ClairvoyantObstruction |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 02/10/2009 |
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- Title: Girl Who Lost
- Artist: ClairvoyantObstruction
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Description:
this is my first entry in the writing section! it is free-verse. it is personal. it's not that great, but i ask that you vote fairly and i would appreciate *constructive* criticism, so i can improve. thanks!
~moon_ninja - Date: 02/10/2009
- Tags: girl lost
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Comments (6 Comments)
- ClairvoyantObstruction - 05/17/2009
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1. would you pleas explain *why* it's so bad?
2. i'm sorry it reminded you of yourself..it's actually about one of my friends...... - Report As Spam
- planet-lover4er - 05/13/2009
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when i read this all i could think about is me and i don't like that i thought of me
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- dark_elven_vampire - 05/08/2009
- i know it is your first one, i am trying to help like you said, but is stinks so bad, well bye JOIN TWILIGHT-THE OFFICIAL CLAN
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- ClairvoyantObstruction - 02/17/2009
- feedback helps peoples!!!!
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- lacunacoilboy - 02/10/2009
- cool i like it its nice and makes me happy i just got dumped
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