Decision

• Artist: The Face You Run From
• Description: Was bored.. Don't get pissy with me because it's about that. I JUST WROTE IT... Nothing else.
• Date: 03/04/2009
• Tags: decision

With little twist
I slit my wrist...

Not waiting life to kill
Rather my own blood spill...

It's my own choice, I have no fears
Only pain, in eyes some unshed tears...

On the floor, blood making stains
Slowly releasing me from my pains...

Bloody stains, stains like in my soul
Caused by all the pain this life is so foul...

Vision finally fading away, soon it's all done
Staring darkness, oh so black, soon it's all gone...

Soon I'm released, free from all this pain
Suffering and life, it was all just in vain...

Thought, funny how blood makes difference between life and death
Farewell life, so painful, so useless, gonna take my last breath...

Comments

[summer1412]

Not bad, technically, but extremely cliche. The wording could be a little more creative as well. I think you would be rather good if only you'd open your vocabulary and subject matter a bit in your poetry. Good job nonetheless, though.

[Serenity The Angels]

this is one of the best i have looked at so far

[Night Angelic]

not bad