Pain

• Artist: Ultra Angelhottie15
• Description: do u know what pain is i think i do
• Date: 03/14/2009
• Tags: pain

Pain is like a burn inside
with a hurt so bad
you cannot hid
Pain is like a flame
one you cant blow out
it makes you remember shame
how love hurts
And when the year ends in december
Pain waits
to hate
to kill

Pain is like a flaming ember
it never goes away
it makes you remember
your hurt
your heartbreak
your hate

Comments

[Ultra Angelhottie15]

yeah well ill try to fix that

[Emerald Charm]

Hmm...That's one kind of pain, but you might want to explore all the kinds of emotional and mental anguish. Also, yeah, the typos absolutely KILLED the mood. 2/5

Learn to edit.

[stormy-oak]

The emotion here is great; however, some of that gets lost in the typos. It's lovely, I would just do a touch more editing before posting.