you were mine....

• Artist: Primrose Petals
• Description: It talks about how a guy once was mine but no longer is......
• Date: 03/27/2009
• Tags: were mine

once you were mine....And you loved me....but not as much as i loved you.....you ended all to soon....the one last question i have is...Why?You left me hanging off a cliff and now i fell and you were not there to catch me you just stepped away and let me crash into the cold hard ground and kicked me while i was down but you were not finished you stabbed me in the back and threw me out like i was a doll and now i still love you and i dont know why....... cry

Comments

[Miekka Kuoleman]

very good in my opinion, a great metaphor, my only suggestion is take the 'is' out of the line "the one last question i have is ....why?" other than that it's very good

[NostaIgia]

It's... run-on ish.
It's also kind of hard to follow. But I like it! 3/5.

[maydaymouse]

im srry, i know how u feel...but i do like the poem so 5/5