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Surround by Darkness
My body is cold
But
As I open my eyes
In this new light
I feel lighter
Warmer
The light
Cuts through the darkness
All I can feel is
Hope
Warmth
Freedom
Love
I Will Spread My Wings
And Fly
- by Kodocha_Sana |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 03/28/2009 |
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- Title: Transformation
- Artist: Kodocha_Sana
- Description: A poem i wrote for my english class
- Date: 03/28/2009
- Tags: transformation
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Fyrewalle - 04/05/2009
- Yes i agree, it could be better. You could use more descriptive words, try some figurative language. Compare and contrast. Try and make something that jumps of the page, not that is just a list. I want to feel what your telling me, implore use of appeals to all the senses.
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- SeductiveKitty - 04/05/2009
- its ok could be a teeny bit better but I like it
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