The Block

• Artist: La Soleil Blanche
• Description: I'm pretty new to any form of poetry writings and this is one of my first attempts.. I'm sure its easy to figure out, but its about this frustrating obstacle in my life, which seems to be that I have an extremely terrible time trying to express myself with words.
  Really i'd just like any sorta of feedback.
• Date: 04/06/2009
• Tags: block

The block

Something inside me knows what to say,
But when the words pass my lips…
I draw a blank.
And I’m at a loss for words,
Because I don’t know how to express...
What am I feeling?
How do you frustrate me
To my deepest core?
And you cannot hear me scream
When I don’t let out my emotions,
are stronger than this.
Any words I could mince.
And the fact of the matter is,
It’s not like it matters
What I have to say,
So I’ll just shut my mouth
And look astray.
And I’d like to give you a piece of my mind
But I’m afraid I’ve got
Little left of it to give away

Comments

[La Soleil Blanche]

OH, its fine. I just put it up because I think i need improvement. Thank you! smile

[MistaThunder]

.. Its pretty okay .. But >-<;; As a poetry writer myself .. I say .. Go for imagination .. Metaphors because you're using many good words .. But .. I couldnt build an image .. I think .. I dont know >-<;; Dont take this to heart .. Its just how i tend to write my poetry (: 3'd ! D: