Figment of Love's Fantasy

• Artist: PoeticDarkAngel
• Description: I wrote this a while back. Let me know what you think I appreciate critiques.
• Date: 04/06/2009
• Tags: figment loves fantasy

Based on a dream
Our love was just a fantasy
But after a while
I woke up to reality
You weren't true before
And you weren't true while with me
But how I fell face first in love
Was an ugly sight to see
But not half as ugly
As the game you played with
Yet I continued playing
In an act of idiocy
The happy times were good
But bliss was obtained haphazardly
By trying to make something
Out of what wasn't meant to be
Falsely stumbling
Toward an unfilled prophecy
Pretending to be blind
To what was right in front of me
Big bold letters
YOU WERE NOT MEANT FOR ME
But for another
Who can stand to fall hellishly
Who can take the fact
That you will never
Anything more than a dream
A figment of love's fantasy

Comments

[twilightfroggysings]

Very nice!
I can even relate to it! 5/5!

[xXxdreaming-of-deathxXx]

5/5 its umm how to explain this hmm... lets just say its good enough to get my mind to think better (: xD

[NakedJack]

I think its good, but it could be better. You aren't a bad artist, that is obvious, but the expression of the invisible in this seemed lacking. Like there is something lost from the translation of feelings to words. Still going to give it a 5/5, its relevant and most poems on gaia are just complete garbage. You aren't limited like a song writer, but you don't have the music to help either. You have to make up for that.