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Light
The light of day,
Came around May.
It wasn't very bright,
Even for my own sight.
Was this the end of the world?
Or was the sun being hurled?
We weren't getting enough heat,
I might end up with cold feet!
Then a miracle appeared!
Us, the people, started to get seared.
The sun started to show,
Now I was a happy joe.
- by louisealpb8 |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/26/2009 |
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- Title: Light
- Artist: louisealpb8
- Description: I'm on a roll! For some reason I'm writing a lot of poems today. I made this poem just for your entertainment! I hope you like it!
- Date: 04/26/2009
- Tags: light
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Demon Natsiki - 05/19/2009
- I don't think it has enough excitment and spirit but it is a good start
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- louisealpb8 - 05/09/2009
- Thank you! I'm glad you liked the poem! smile
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- AEP5945 - 04/30/2009
- I loved this one. Its really amazing! I have to agree with the guy below it does flow! biggrin
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- Mr Eliot - 04/26/2009
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wow, really good poem!
i mean it, the lines are really inventive and they flow well throughout!
the whole getting seared part almost sounds a bit dark, but maybe thats just me XD - Report As Spam
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