Happiness is a Myth

• Artist: Ray Ray86
• Description: One day after going through a bad break up with my boyfriend. I thought I could at least count my friends to talk to them because I was so hurt. But they wasn't there for me come to find out they was with my ex. After a few weeks went by I forgave them and took them back. Like the saying goes "fool me once shame on you fool me twice same on me" But i guess in the end we never really learn. That is what inspired me to write these words of this poem.
• Date: 05/03/2009
• Tags: happiness myth

Why is it that we do the things we do
Is it because we're jealous and live our life's with hate
is it because we forget to think and learn from our mistakes

why do people judge everyone even those that they don't know
a guy see's a girl walking down the street and just assumes the worst

why can't we all just be happy for one and another
live, love, and laugh that is just hatred undercover

why do we put ourselves through depression and despair
why do we listen to others when they don't really care

we put ourselves in agony when others let us down
why do we depend on them when they just make us frown

hatred is a dirty word that I really don't like to use
but when you have been hurt as bad as I
there is no other to abuse

Comments

[FuriazFTW]

Uh...

While I slightly understood what you felt... a lot of this seems like forced rhyming. There was a distinct lack of grammar, lack of imagery, lack of symbolism... lack of anything that makes poetry, poetry. (Other than basic rhyming, but is that even worth noting?)

Not to mention, there are some positive emotions in life as well. Your poem lacked any way for the reader to experience what you feel.

1/5. Consider revising your poems before you post them.