Bright White Light

• Artist: Uel Tomas
• Description: Just something that i had to write down, comments welcome.
• Date: 05/04/2009
• Tags: bright white light

The light fades
Know its still day
Yet its fading away
I lay and ponder its reasons
Maybe suns confused the seasons
Maybe it just couldn't stay

Light comes back in a tunnel
Floods the ground around me
Still in a pool of light
Its too bright, too white
Want to forget how to see

Must you take me
Back through your tunnel
Maybe i prefer my dark and misery
Maybe your lights just too bright for me
Will miss my colours and shades
Your whites just too bright for me
and if thats all you have
I'll be happy not to see
With technicolour memory
Bright white just ain't for me
No no it ain't for me
Leave me my blue sky and rainbow memory, Memory

Comments

[Fille aux Cheveux de Lin]

I'm confused with the rhythm on the last stanza (which, by the way, I think you should split into smaller pieces).
It's starts very poetically, and much like a poem, though "No no it ain't for me" sounds more like a song. Which is it?
I do like this though, particullarly about the sun forgetting seasons.
4/5

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