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There you lay
I cry
As I look at you
The night before
I had dreamt of us
Together forevermore
But now,
In my arms I hold,
My love
His body,
Stiff and cold
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- by CannibalWizards |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 06/01/2009 |
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- Title: Gone
- Artist: CannibalWizards
- Description: It just popped into my head. xD
- Date: 06/01/2009
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Jadis the Immortal - 08/24/2011
- its nice but empty... add a lil fluff to it
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- CannibalWizards - 06/03/2009
- Um..I dont really know most of those words. Dx Im not a professional at this kind of stuff. But thanks for the advice?
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- b00_2 - 06/02/2009
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It lacks poetry techniches.
You should have stuff like alliteration, similies, metaphores, assonance, consanance, voice, etc... - Report As Spam