Promise

• Artist: rainbowprincess15
• Description: this is a poem i wrote for my schools prom promise
  { it was a english report}
  PLEASE COMMENT!!!!!
• Date: 07/04/2009
• Tags: promise

im lying in the street not knowing where i am
im probibly in the ground somwhere a ditch or a dam
i can here the sirens behind me as they pull up to the car
two men come out and step over the coupious tar
i hear the men say that i was sure as dead
they said that as they lifted my best friends head
i look at my prom dress wich is covered in blood and dirt
i can see that my best friend Brie is very badly hurt
you might think she was the driver of the scene
but in reality that very driver was me
"i had had just a drink or two" is what i would have said
but now unfourtunatley i am.............dead

Comments

[pandoraLKLK]

I like the whole idea of it, but it was okay..

[the_ashen_child]

i like it

[ree-ree_bear]

I don't like it. You've focused more on your cliché ryhmes more then the poem it self.
It makes it corny and boring.
Sorryx3

[rainbowprincess15]

it is like one ive heard but it was supposed to be like that we had to make it from a perspective of either the drunk person or the victim :]

[II KEIKI II]

ive heard that b4 :/

[Dragons Willow]

that's a good one! i remember the prom promise!!! this needs some sprucing up, spell checking, but other than that....nice! 5/5 for being informative and for awareness!!