Desent to Darkness

• Artist: Ty Lee Totally Rox
• Description: My friend inspired this one.
• Date: 07/09/2009
• Tags: desent darkness

As for the emotion of happiness I am the number one,
Just being happy is my idea of fun.

There is no darkness inside,
Not a thing I have to hide.

This all I knew was that happy feeling,
But now it's peeling.

There is darkness inside,
This was the only thing I have to hide.

I can hardly see,
This darkness is blinding me.

The darkness has taken over the inside,
This is darkness is hard to hide.

The darkness is all over outside and inside,
This darkness I can not hide.

Why is it that there is none for me,
When darkness is all I see.

Comments

[Ketsuyin]

Very nice. I like how it progresses and you tell a long story in just a few stanzas.

My only problem with it is you seem to use 'ide' too much as your rhym connection. A little less use of 'inside' and 'hide' would do this poem good.