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Rawr
Beautyful boy of mine.
Oh you are so undefined.
Alway let you light shine.
Always be mine.
You save me from the dark abyss
Giver of never ending bliss.
You bring everything back to life with just your kiss.
The sound of your beating heart is something I never want to miss.
Your arms are the only home I need.
You doctered my heart so it wouldn't bleed.
With you all sorrows are freed.
Some how my soul you can read.
Tonight i'll dream of your sweet eyes.
While we lay under the star filled skys.
I've waited and now I have my prize.
I finaly have my angel in disguise.
- by Disfunctionl Lamb |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/29/2009 |
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- Title: Rawr
- Artist: Disfunctionl Lamb
- Description: Just a poem....nothin all that great -_-.
- Date: 07/29/2009
- Tags: rawr
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Death Of The Killer - 07/31/2010
- o_o Wow, NICE.
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- Devlus - 09/05/2009
- I like it, babes. Of course, I should considering it's about me. wink
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- Razzz25 - 08/06/2009
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You worked too hard on the rhyming you lack flow and rhythm.
I like your visuals though.
Nice work.
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- Disfunctionl Lamb - 07/30/2009
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Elegant larina:Thankyou =). That was much needed insight!
Zero FxOxP:Thanks!LOl course ya can! You can do whatever you want to it. It just a poem.^_^ - Report As Spam
- Akuma no Zenku - 07/30/2009
- The subject is wonderful It is obvious though you were trying to rhyme the last word of each sentence. You got the emotion across to the reader. Also you should run the poem through a spell checker.
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- Zero FxOxP - 07/29/2009
- Wow I love it! 5/5. Um can I use this poem for a girl I really like? That's the only thing I would change and I'd still give you credit.
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