Waiting Forever

• Artist: Hakuo The White Phoenix
• Description: It's not very good and I dislike it. I feel it might be the worst I've ever written.
• Date: 09/03/2009
• Tags: waiting forever

Before we go
Before we leave
Can we hold onto each other please
Can I hold onto to you just one last time
Now before we have to say goodbye

I'm holding on
To the thought of you
For as long
As I can
Til we can be together once again

Til I can hold your hands in mine
Til we are intertwined
Til I can look in your eyes
And see the heavens above
Til I can feel your heart
Beating to the sound of love

I'll wait
Til your here beside me
I'll wait
Til I can love you freely
I'll wait
Til we're here together
I'll wait
Til we can love forever

Now take my hand
Remember how it feels
Remember that I'm here
Remember I am real

Cause now you leave
As I do to
But I promise that
I won't lose you

I'll wait
Til we're reunited
I'll wait
Til you'll be my bride and
I'll wait
Til we can hold each other
I'll wait
Til we can love forever
I'll wait
To see your smile
I'll wait
If only for a while
I'll wait
Right for her
I'll wait
Forever.

Comments

[White Lights Reprisal]

I've been in that situation, kinda brings a tear or two to my eyes; then again it could mean my oversensitivity is kicking in. 5/5!

[Pokaberry]

its 'till' not 'til' -_-'
otherwise its its not bad. wink 4/5

[Hakuo The White Phoenix]

well as a perfectionist I feel I've done poorly on this work

[t-t-ten million fireflies]

Really now? I like it! One of the few literate poems that I do enjoy on Gaia and you don't like it!
Although towards the middle I can't seem to get the rhythm, but I'm weird like that. I like it!