I am

• Artist: Nadiramonica
• Description: I made this one in school and if u like it dats good if u dont u dont!!
  but there will be plenty of more where dat come from!!!
• Date: 08/17/2010
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I am wind that blows the air
I am cheetah with the spread of light
I am a color red filled with romance
I am happy little town named Harrisburg, a town up north
I am paper in which ideas float on
I am deception that fools you with my glorious beauty
I am the mother earth you try to destroy
I am a goddess of love soft and gentle
I am a woman who gives birth to children
I am a girl alone in the world
I am lion strong and proud
I am you and you are me
I am a student in class waiting to be done
I am the ocean that reflects the sky
I am a daughter of innocents waiting to be saved
I am what you want me to be
I am everything you see
I am me

Comments

[Nadiramonica]

thank you

[Eidolon Style]

Very nice idea. I liked how you sort of had several paradoxes in there of what you are (I am .. . . . )

I think you could of organized all of the 'I am's better, so that it was less spontaneous, because it was indeed quite spontaneous. The last three lines are very satisfying, though. I wouldn't change them unless you manage to find something even better.

Great! Fantastic! 4/5. Check out my poem, called 'The One?'

[II Deenox II]

that was really awesome!!!!!!! me like